I shall not pass this way again
but if you should, in sun or rain
or when spring flowers bedeck the grass
remember me, where your feet pass
and shed a tear, in happiness
for all once dear, though passed in us
is limitless.
© Experimentsinfiction 2021, All Rights Reserved
Lisa is hosting at dVerse, and has asked us to use the word ‘way’ in our quadrille: a poem of exactly 44 words. When I learned the prompt word, I immediately thought of a beautiful poem by Eva Rose York, to which I was introduced by fellow poet and blogger Michele Lee Sefton. So I borrowed the first line and wrote a condensed poem on a similar theme.
I chose daffodils for the image as a reminder that spring is on the way, and also in remembrance of my mother, sister and grandmother, who all loved these flowers.
That really is a lovely poem.
Thank you Vinny 🌼
The sense of loss is so great in this… but the way to cope is to remember all that was good I think.
I think so too 🙏
I love that you chose to write about daffodils, Ingrid. Your poem brought a tear to my eye as it would have been my grandmother’s birthday today and she was a huge fan of daffs. I keep checking our garden for signs of yellow buds. Great use of slant rhyme, too.
I’m pleased this evoked a happy memory of your grandmother. Even when someone special has been gone a long time, we still miss them.
This made me think of the Christina Rossetti poem. There’s so much sadness in this acceptance of the finite for us, infinity for everything else.
But I like to think all is not lost even then.
There’s always memory.
The emotions of the poem are so vivid to me. Your choice of daffodils and thinking of your mother, sister and grandmother here….all so very much “inside” this poem, if that makes sense. I love this line in particular “spring flowers bedeck the grass” especially as in Boston we’ve no snow….just the bare trees and bare cement and bare ground. Daffodils and forsythia are my favorite spring blooms – both the brightness of yellow. 🙂
Thank you, Lillian: before too long they should be blooming again 😊
Beautiful and solemn. This reminds me of one of Neruda’s most popular poems, one of my favorites by him. I can’t think of the name but the common phrase was “Remember me…”
Oh yes, I think I know the one you mean. Thank you so much Lucy!
A lovely poem. Made me think of Wordsworth, and not just because of the daffies!🙂
That’s very kind, Hobbo! I do have family from Cockermouth…
😂
A lovely echo from the work of Eva Rose York. Thanks for sharing the inspiration of Eva Rose York. She grew up in the same general area of my province.
It’s a really beautiful poem and I would like to read more of her work 🌹
Lovely soothing meter and rhyme that felt peaceful whilst reading it.
Thank you, I’m pleased it did that for you 🙏
I love the idea of bringing your loved ones back in shared love held for lovely bringers of sunlight in their petals. Cherishing each one as a connector to heaven. So achingly beautiful, Ingrid.
We have these flowers to help us remember their beauty.
Powerfully deep, achingly open to loss. Wonderfully developed, Ingrid. Congrats.
Thanks Ron 😊
I like the notion “if we should pass this way again”, but as to “remember me” it could be rough as we pass through the veil of forgetfulness on the way back.
That’s true: I think I wrote it from their perspective looking back.
This is really beautiful Ingrid. Lovely work. 🌷🌸🌀
Thank you Lia 🙏🌼
Luv this craft. Its nice to be remembered in a happy way
Happy Monday
Much💖love
Thank you Gillena 😊🙏
Your words have softly walked into my soul…..❣
Thank you Ivor 😊
Lovely piece Ingrid – I know it’s personal to you – but the poem also touches that universal loss we all feel – (in line with other comments above) it reminds me of a piece by Basho – ‘A thicket of summer grass / is all that remains / of the dreams and ambitions / of ancient warriors.
Thank you – for introducing me to a new poem too!
Be still my heart …. this is exquisite.
I’m pleased you liked it ❤️
You’ve exquisitely captured the essence of the original.
Thanks Ken, I’m glad if I managed to do that!
Lovely poem.
Thank you 😊
I love your beautiful sentiments expressed here!
Thank you Dwight 🙏
Your are welcome!
Ingrid, I love what you have created with York’s beautiful first line and your meaningful and symbolic choice of daffodils. I am pleased that you enjoyed the poem; it is a lovely one! 💗
Thank you, Michele, I did indeed ❤️🌼
Beautiful 😍 Enjoyed the gentle rhythm and flow. The ending is perfect. ✨
Thank you Tricia 🥰
So beautifully expressed from your heart and lovely gift to your Mother, sistern and grandmother Ingrid!!!! ❤️
Thank you Cindy 🙏❤️🌼
Always ❤️❤️🤗
Thank you Cindy 🥰
You’re so welcome Ingrid!!!!
The flow and rhyme swept me up right away, and I love how you tied it to another poet’s poem! Well done!
-David
It felt like cheating a bit, but it was such a lovely poem, I wanted to do a kind of ‘tribute’
I humbly submit that you succeeded!
Thank you David 🙏
This is written from the heart, I could feel your emotions through your words and the flow is fabulous!
Thank you Jay 💛
ouch that’s a lot of losses Ingrid, a lovely tribute to them and all those gone before us!
Thank you Kate 🙏
welcome Ingrid
A fitting reflection on our interconnectedness. (K)
This is so deep 🍁
Thank you, Jude: it was heartfelt ❤️
WOW. This touches my soul. I love the photo too.
Sending love.
Thank you Gabriela 🙏 sending much love to you also ❤️
My pleasure ❤️
This is beautiful and made me cry. The loss is palpable.
Thank you, Linda. These losses show us the strength of our love.
Yes, they certainly do.
Sadly riveting Ingrid, so well written!
Thank you Rob 🌼
for all once dear,
though passed in us
is limitless.
Yes, Ingrid, we had better to take the opportunity when it conveniently presented itself
Hank
So very true 🙏
This is beautiful. Feel heartfelt and full of memory, loss and love.
Absolutely beautiful. Heart wrenching, but lovely. I love the flow of words and emotions. I like how you added the first line of another poem too. Very clever.
Thank you 🙏
sorry I’m late – hopefully we won’t be hearing the same from Spring when she gets here!
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Beautiful tribute to oncoming spring – love your hopeful message here!
We need to find hope somewhere!
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