Queen of the last line #poetry #dVerse

Queen of the last line
of defence, I stake
an arrow through your heart
most cupid-like
and wait for you to feel it.

Direct hit: you are falling
under my powerful spell
it may lead you to heaven
or drag you down to hell:
don’t say you didn’t want it.

Queen of the last line
drawing a circle around you,
and drawing you in
there’s no easy way out
(I feel you should know this
before you begin.)

I’ve done my due diligence: 
you, I’m determined to know
and in return you will come
to think you know me,
though rest assured
it isn’t so.

Queen of the last line
I’ll take my sweet time
as I draw you in again,
then cast you out
if you planned to become mine
you were deceived by your every last
thought

Queen of the last line
of defence, I stake
an arrow through your heart
and though you try to pull it out
you’ll never fail to feel it.

 © Experimentsinfiction 2021, All Rights Reserved

Written for dVerse

I am guest hosting over at dVerse later today, where my challenge is to write a poem in the voice of a fictional character. I have always been fascinated by ruthless female characters such as Lady Macbeth. When I first started writing the Chronicles of Lockdownia, perhaps I envisioned the Queen in this mould, though she turned out to be far more benevolent. The Queen of the Last Line is a different character altogether…

The bar opens from 3pm EST, so join me at dVerse for more Experiments in Fiction!

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  1. Nicely done, and it’s the first time I ever got a preview of an impending dVerse topic, even though my schedule today probably will not allow me to take advantage of this head start.

      1. Haha! Well he does say in the beginning of the short story that creation of art is not his gift, but in my rewrite I do have him quote Shakespeare now. He is very appreciative of poetry!

  2. I like your creation a lot… but the queen seems a lot meeker than than lady Macbeth… I think she will an arrow like that, to me it seems almost like an avenging angel dressed up as cupid.

  3. Wow, she is such a strong willed Queen. That refraining lines of staking the arrow through her heart and her never feeling it shows her emotional wasteland (if there is such a word).

    Thank you for hosting and bringing this challenge to our poetry community.

    1. Thank you Grace, I hope that everyone will enjoy the challenge. I look forward to meeting a whole cast of characters…

  4. I love ruthless female characters too, Ingrid! Your queen of the last line is intriguing, and I’d like to know more about her, what her back story is, what has made her ruthless.

  5. She’s alluring, beguiling, and you’ll never leave the circle once bound. That’s what I call a wicked woman, one who delights in enslaving those who love her! Great voice here, Ingrid.

  6. I really like “queen of the last line.” She definitely intends to be the last one standing, and she enjoys every bit of pain she inflicts. I’ll keep away!

  7. Ooh this is so fresh and original, Ingrid! 💝 I love the rhythmic flow of the language.. each word carefully placed, as you lead us to unravel the intentions of the queen of the last line. *applauds*

  8. love this Ingrid.

    These lines:
    💖
    “Direct hit: you are falling
    under my powerful spell
    it may lead you to heaven
    or drag you down to hell:
    don’t say you didn’t want it.”

  9. This makes me think this can be read in more than one way — “you were deceived by your every last / thought”
    Especially since she is the “Queen of the last line”

  10. I’m wondering if Queen of the Last Line is acquainted with Queen of the Last Word, who is equally formidable. Your poem is so well written.

  11. I think there are many ‘queen[s] of the last line’ out there! They are a tough bunch for sure and don’t hold back from their craft! Enjoyed this very much!

    1. Thanks Carol, I’m so glad you did 😊

      I can’t comment on your post without signing up, but I wanted to say that I loved the perspective you provided of life in a wheelchair. People don’t think about the everyday challenges faced by those with mobility issues, but you brought them to life.

  12. and though you try to pull it out
    you’ll never fail to feel it.

    Never can one underestimate the strength of defensive offense in retaliating for one’s own safety!. Thanks for hosting Ingrid! Great prompt!

    Hank

  13. Maybe not as sinister or power hungry as Lady Macbeth, a conniving Queen you have created whose line I would not want to cross! 👑 🏹

  14. Beautifully done Ingrid! I love how you draw him in laying claim to his heart only to tell him…
    and in return you will come
    to think you know me,
    though rest assured
    it isn’t so.

  15. I read this Queen as the strongest most vital warrior in every poem’s checkmate — all that has been said delivered in triumph in the poem’s final salvo. She is most deserving of our terror humility and killing stroke. The belle dame sans merci who is hard to materialize and has no sympathy for poor craft … Thanks for bringing and wringing her here … Great work on the challenge Ingrid … Brendan

    1. Thanks Brendan: to hear herself described la belle dame sans merci would make her smile. A merciless smile, of course!

  16. I love this Ingrid. Ah this queen is a Dark Muse. She does pierce harshly and once impaled, she teases out the leash – lets you think you have a sense of control over her, but in the end you know to whom you belong.

  17. This is really wonderful Ingrid.

    “Queen of the last line
    I’ll take my sweet time
    as I draw you in again,
    then cast you out
    if you planned to become mine
    you were deceived by your every last
    thought”

    Beautiful.
    xoxo

  18. I love the image of a queen of the last line of defense. I can hear her voice echoing through every argument I’ve ever lost.

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