a holding area
at the fall of Rome
tracks held on by rusted nails
Your eyes sparkle
making the whole day
worth the entrance fee
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Thank you 🙏
Wonderful cadralor, Ingrid. I love the flash of images and the feeling that it’s all worthwhile at the end.
Thanks Merril: I shied away from calling it a Cadralor because perhaps the images are too closely connected-but it is certainly based on the form!
You’re welcome, Ingrid. Close enough to the form for me. 😏
These are awesome, with the final piece nailing it with the perfect twist! Great work!
Thank you so much Carolyn!
Nice ones. Loved them
Loved the last stanza with the “sparkle” a perfect contrast to the lackluster that comes before. It really is all perspective! ❣️
Indeed it is! Thank you Tricia 💕
Those places caught in time, overlapping with now. (K)
It is a nostalgic place for me…
Your words paint history in the past and making… love these Ingrid!
Thank you Cindy 🎢 ❤️
You’re so welcome Ingrid!! 💖💖
Oh, those are all so true, and fun. Lovely poetry, Ingrid.
Thank you Jeff! 🙏
Those ending lines sold me on the whole poetic experience, Ingrid! Love this writing.
Glad to hear it Jaya 😊
It is fortunate that the company outshone the venue. Glad you had a good time, Ingrid! <3 They blew up my childhood roller coaster at Ocean View in Virginia Beach while making a movie a few years ago. 🙂
Thank you Cheryl. How interesting – deliberately, I presume? I imagine that was a little sad for you ❤️
The flashes of images you have captured are wonderful, Ingrid! ❤️