As snow falls silent through a sullen grey
sky, without a wisp of winter sun
I only hope my love comes through today.
The timetable must bring either dismay
or hope – will loneliness or fun
win out, this gentle January day?
The robin on the railings does not play
but seeks succour and warmth, alone like one
who only hopes her love comes through today.
The branches, bare, which, windless, do not sway
but bend beneath their weight, and hope the sun
will out, this gentle January day
Look down upon my work, but do not say,
write on, until your poetry is done:
I only hope my love comes through today.
I wait your message: Love, what will it say?
That you will join me, or the plan’s undone
upon this gentle January day
I only hope my love comes through today.
More lyrical poetry…
I hope you find this post inspiring, and perhaps that it encourages you to submit to New Lyricist, if you have not done so already. There is still time until 1 February. Thank you to all who have submitted so far! Stay tuned for a new musical release from Team EIF very soon…
Ingrid
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βοΈ π
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Ingrid, your repetition skillfully emphasizes emotional undercurrents, and the imagery adds depth. For me, your exploration of longing resonates well. Well done on crafting an evocative piece!
~David
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Thank you, David!
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Such a wonderful poem.
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Thank you Edward π
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And I hope the plan was fulfilled! Lovely images of nature, as always. (K)
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It was, Kerfe, thank you!
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I LOVE your poem, particularly the evocation of the January landscape and the repetition of “this gentle January day” and “I only hope my love comes through today.” A very impressive poetic achievement! Brava!!
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I am very glad you enjoyed this, Liz, thank you!
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I can easily visualize the poet’s wistful expression… waiting and wondering. Lovely. π Thank you for sharing your poetry.
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Thank you, Michele, I enjoyed writing this π
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You’re very welcome, Ingrid. π btw I am almost done with Cindy’s book… will be highlighting before the month’s end.
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Excellent π€©
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Oh, Ingrid, what a sweet poem! It is relatable because I really hate waiting for anything! <3 The older I get, the less patience I have!
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I’m really glad you enjoyed the poem and could identify with its themes, Cheryl, thank you!
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a wistful poem indeed, really appeals!
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I am glad you liked it, Kate, thank you βΊοΈ
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Such a lovely poem! Loving the repeating line that the poem so beautifully ends on.
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Thank you for your kind words, Layla!
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The sweet ache of love. Beautiful, Ingrid!
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Thank you Susi! β€οΈ
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You’re welcome, Ingrid! <3
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Nice π
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Thank you π
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Nice π
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Beautifully expressed!
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Thank you Dawn βΊοΈ
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