I write my heart out… #haibun #dVerse

I write my heart out down the page in big, bold letters:

Here
Ever
After
Read
Truth

I also write my truth. What is my truth?

To
Receive 
Understanding 
Travel 
Here

Travel where? To the: 

Compass-defying
Eternal
Neverland
Tidal
Reciprocal
Eden

If I’d used American English, this would have read ‘Eden Reciprocal.’ Perhaps it would have sounded better. Still, it’s the same place: the centre of a black hole, zero-divide-zero, undefined region.

Would you risk a dive
over the unknowable
event horizon?

Written for dVerse

Today, Tricia is hosting Poetics, and has asked us to use ‘risk’ in our poetry, in one or more of the following ways:

  • by tackling difficult subjects 
  • by laying bare a personal struggle in vivid detail
  • by writing on any topic as long the word “risk” is used (perhaps the risk we take falling in love)
  • by exploring a new writing form that you may find “risky” or unconventional

I tried out a new form, a haibun featuring acrostics. It started off being about writing from the heart and ended up being about taking risks. Perhaps the two are one and the same.

I watched a Netflix documentary on black holes recently, which blew my mind more than a little bit.

71 thoughts on “I write my heart out… #haibun #dVerse

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  1. To be centered and grounded in the truth is really good compass Ingrid. I admire the acrostics of the verses.

    That’s next on my list of netflix viewing too.

    1. Thank you Björn: I’ve been trying to wrap my head around the fact that even the fundamental laws of physics may break down at that point!

  2. Ingrid,
    I love the boldness of the words, the “in-your-face” attitude towards that which stands just beyond what is known now. Risk writ large “big bold letters), but promising at the very least.
    pax,
    dora

  3. Loving the way you have formatted your train of thought, Ingrid! Exploring our deepest wishes and unconscious desires is a form of diving over the horizon’s edge or, potentially, examining a black hole. 🙂

  4. This is absolutely stellar writing, Ingrid 😀 I love the boldness of the format- the crisp and palpable emotion and dare of giving it your all in this poem. I say, we go for it! 💝💝

  5. This is absolutely stellar writing, Ingrid 😀 I love the boldness of the format, the crisp and palpable emotion and call to giving it our all. I say, we go for it! 💝💝

  6. 🤯 Mind blown! The truth should always be our compass. Reminds me of Jiminy Cricket a little “let your conscience be your guide.” I will have to check out that documentary on black holes. Appreciate your creativity here! 💕

  7. A clever write with good use of acrostic.
    And your last comment…

    ‘Would you risk a dive
    over the unknowable
    event horizon?’

    happens to give us ‘Woe’ which may well be the case should we take that risk 🙂

  8. You were clever and creative to tackle cosmic consciousness as an acrostic. Such fun.

  9. Clever writing with good use of Acrostic.
    Your final comment also has something to say (acrostically!)

    Would you risk a dive
    over the unknowable
    event horizon?
    Woe. Which is exactly what we may encounter should we take that risk 🙂

  10. I will have to catch that Netflix documentary, Ingrid, It must be pretty inspirational to prompt you to write such a delightful post! I like that you are writing something unique and creative on a challenging topic. <3

  11. Would you risk a dive
    over the unknowable
    event horizon?

    A classic rhetorical question to round off all the delimiting nuances of man. Great shot Ingrid!

    Hank

  12. The form, how you made each word a statement, the message ~~ amazing poem!! I have braved ‘the dive’ …. and yes, worth it. Can’t wait to watch the Documentary.

  13. Love this experiment. The acrostic format and how we circle down with you wanting to find the center of all this truth. Risky, and a risk rewarded, Ingrid.

  14. My comment seems to have disappeared…the gist was that you show us your truth and your heart, and we are also the better for it. (K)

  15. i love your poem and the risk of being you! And yes as David said in his poem, we are thrown into this risk and it is now up to us until Reciprocal Eden! ( a great metaphor)

  16. The acrostic. The general layout of the poem. The black hole reference with Neverland and Eden. Your pen was creative and intriguing, Ingrid. I enjoyed this.

  17. i just adorned this part”

    “If I’d used American English, this would have read ‘Eden Reciprocal.’ Perhaps it would have sounded better. Still, it’s the same place: the centre of a black hole, zero-divide-zero, undefined region.”

    this was brilliant, very well written

  18. I would fear a crushing nothingness Ingrid, but if your Eden is there I hope you find it (and get a message back to me so I can change my mind).

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