‘Twas not the lark, his song melodious
but rather the seagull squark which woke us
more so the fact
that fated day had dawned when we must part:
Oh, not at morningtide, of course
(some hours hence) but still
anon, and on our love endures
enlightening our art
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Written for dVerse
Tonight, Laura hosts Meeting The Bar, and asks us to write an Aubade, which can be any one of the following:
- a poem evoking daybreak/greeting the dawn
- a poem about lovers parting at dawn
A tried to write a modern twist on the traditional Aubade, which (in English) dates back to the 17th Century.
Bravo Ingrid – conjuring the traditional but with that lovely twist in the ending
Thank you Laura 🙏
I think waking to a seagull would be better than any sweet birdsong but I love the sea
I do too, but it is not the prettiest of birdsongs 😅
I like this modern twist on the form. Very clever! 😊
Thank you Merril! 😊
You’re welcome, Ingrid!
Ingrid that was wonderful. The melody was made of air that flitted around the words…loved it.
Thank you so much, Ain!
Truly lovely Ingrid!
Thank you Linda 🙏
This deserves a standing ovation! Beautiful, beautiful work done, Ingrid! ❤️❤️
Thank you Sanaa 💕
Awesome work indeed, Ingrid. Salute!
Thank you very much Ron!
Terrific rocking of the prompt. There is a classical vibe to the piece that is very attractive.
Thank you Glenn!
I enjoyed your rhymes, especially woke us and odious.
Thank you Maria!
A beautiful poem, Ingrid. ☺️
Thank you Jeff 😊
You’re welcome, Ingrid. Always. ☺️
I like the combination of old and new. It makes the impact of the seagull even stronger. (K)
Thank you, Kerfe, this is what I wanted.
So sweet! A squawk will do it. I love “our love endures enlightening our art”.
Thank you Mary: sometimes the seagull squawk is not altogether unpleasant!
Fabulous morning aubade, Ingrid…to greet the new day no matter who wakes us!
Exactly! Thank you Lynn 🙏
Love greets every new day, In many happy and sad ways ….
So true, Ivor! 🙏
I love how you’ve used and tweaked this format. Bitdsongs and seagulls put side by side. 👍🙏
Thanks Lamittan: it was a fun write!
It was indeed, feel most welcome.
How lovely, Ingrid! I like the twist. ❤️
Thank you Punam ❤️
You are so welcome.
I enjoyed the playful approach of this with the odious seagull!
Thank you Marion!
Luv the lingering sweetness of the “enlightening heart”
Thanks for dropping by to read mine
Thanks Gillena 💖
Ingrid, I never thought of the seagull’s squawk as being “odious,” haha, but I am sure it was an unpleasant alarm clock and an unwelcome messenger! Love the poem, and you managed to combine the two themes seamlessly! Very striking photo of the seagull! <3
Thank you, Cheryl: they certainly do have character! ❤️
Lovely work with the rhyming, Ingrid, and the squark made me smile. Never was a seagull sound conveyed more perfectly.
Thank you so much!
Thank you 😊
oh for the love of a squak not my favorite noise from the seagull’s and crows but nicely done Ingrid. 💖💖💖
Thank you 🙏
Love the style in which this was written. A lovely, melodic poem!
Thank you so much!