‘Twas not the lark, his song melodious
but rather the seagull squark which woke us
~somewhat odious~
more so the fact
that fated day had dawned when we must part:
Oh, not at morningtide, of course
(some hours hence) but still
anon, and on our love endures
enlightening our art
© 2022 experimentsinfiction.com. All Rights Reserved.
Written for dVerse
Tonight, Laura hosts Meeting The Bar, and asks us to write an Aubade, which can be any one of the following:
- a poem evoking daybreak/greeting the dawn
- a poem about lovers parting at dawn
A tried to write a modern twist on the traditional Aubade, which (in English) dates back to the 17th Century.
Experiments in Fiction 
Bravo Ingrid – conjuring the traditional but with that lovely twist in the ending
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Thank you Laura 🙏
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I think waking to a seagull would be better than any sweet birdsong but I love the sea
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I do too, but it is not the prettiest of birdsongs 😅
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I like this modern twist on the form. Very clever! 😊
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Thank you Merril! 😊
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You’re welcome, Ingrid!
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Ingrid that was wonderful. The melody was made of air that flitted around the words…loved it.
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Thank you so much, Ain!
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Truly lovely Ingrid!
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Thank you Linda 🙏
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This deserves a standing ovation! Beautiful, beautiful work done, Ingrid! ❤️❤️
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Thank you Sanaa 💕
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Awesome work indeed, Ingrid. Salute!
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Thank you very much Ron!
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Terrific rocking of the prompt. There is a classical vibe to the piece that is very attractive.
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Thank you Glenn!
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I enjoyed your rhymes, especially woke us and odious.
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Thank you Maria!
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A beautiful poem, Ingrid. ☺️
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Thank you Jeff 😊
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You’re welcome, Ingrid. Always. ☺️
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I like the combination of old and new. It makes the impact of the seagull even stronger. (K)
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Thank you, Kerfe, this is what I wanted.
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So sweet! A squawk will do it. I love “our love endures enlightening our art”.
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Thank you Mary: sometimes the seagull squawk is not altogether unpleasant!
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Fabulous morning aubade, Ingrid…to greet the new day no matter who wakes us!
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Exactly! Thank you Lynn 🙏
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Love greets every new day, In many happy and sad ways ….
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So true, Ivor! 🙏
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I love how you’ve used and tweaked this format. Bitdsongs and seagulls put side by side. 👍🙏
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Thanks Lamittan: it was a fun write!
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It was indeed, feel most welcome.
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How lovely, Ingrid! I like the twist. ❤️
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Thank you Punam ❤️
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You are so welcome.
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I enjoyed the playful approach of this with the odious seagull!
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Thank you Marion!
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Luv the lingering sweetness of the “enlightening heart”
Thanks for dropping by to read mine
Much💜love
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Thanks Gillena 💖
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Ingrid, I never thought of the seagull’s squawk as being “odious,” haha, but I am sure it was an unpleasant alarm clock and an unwelcome messenger! Love the poem, and you managed to combine the two themes seamlessly! Very striking photo of the seagull! <3
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Thank you, Cheryl: they certainly do have character! ❤️
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Lovely work with the rhyming, Ingrid, and the squark made me smile. Never was a seagull sound conveyed more perfectly.
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Thank you so much!
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Fantastic
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Thank you 😊
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oh for the love of a squak not my favorite noise from the seagull’s and crows but nicely done Ingrid. 💖💖💖
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Lovely!
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Thank you 🙏
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Love the style in which this was written. A lovely, melodic poem!
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Thank you so much!
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